{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34864224","dateCreated":"1298661977","smartDate":"Feb 25, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"cfgonzalez94","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/cfgonzalez94","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34864224"},"dateDigested":1531974014,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Carlos CR.. MR. Webster ITA =(","description":"The short story \u201cThe Lottery\u201d is handled by Jackson in such a way that the story only starts as some sort of a \u201cred-herring\u201d. A decoy that distracts the reader from the reality and gruesomeness of this sinister lottery. Such decoy is achieved through the initial description of the story and its transgression throughout. "The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green". Jackson introduces a beautiful day with a powerful motive: Life. The flowers were blossoming and the grass was green; everything was injected with life, joy, and strength. Then, Jackson moves on to the lottery itself. A social event in which people are anxious and nervous. This is where the initial description becomes crucial. The reader imagines the lottery as something great, as a chance for an ordinary group of people to be rewarded and enjoy their lives, which was the initial motive of the description. But then, the black box makes its appearance. \u201cThe black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained.\u201d The contrast between the initial description of the story, specifically in the word choice, emphasizes that there might be more to the lottery than the reader imagines. The contrast between \u201cfresh\u201d, \u201cclear\u201d, and \u201csunny\u201d compared to \u201cshabbier\u201d, \u201csplintered\u201d, and \u201cstained\u201d reveals the true significance of the lottery. What initially appeared to be so innocent and good turned out to be a ritual of death and sacrifice, and the reader sees this transgression through the description itself. Jackson took an idea that was perceived as great and twisted it into a perverted ideal of a group of people who are subject to traditions of old. The dominant impression, in the end, deals with the concept that something perceived as good can in fact be perverse and evil.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"34802594","dateCreated":"1298582942","smartDate":"Feb 24, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"ereiche","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ereiche","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1226183145\/ereiche-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34802594"},"dateDigested":1531974014,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Erik R","description":"The Lottery by Shirley Jackson is a very well written descriptive piece, which includes a perfect harmony of narrative focus, a dominant impression and concrete language.
\n Shirley Jackson combines simple adjectives and a well thought, chronically path to the story in order to create a successful narrative focus, which facilitates the reader to imagine the story. \u201cThe villagers kept their distance, leaving a space between themselves and the stool. And when Mr. Summers said, "Some of you fellows want to give me a hand?" there was a hesitation before two men. Mr. Martin and his oldest son, Baxter, came forward to hold the box steady on the stool while Mr. Summers stirred up the papers inside it.\u201d (The Lottery) This great combination not only enables us to imagine the whole crowd around the stool, but makes the reader experience a sense of confusion, due to the crowd\u2019s unusual response to a lottery.
\n Shirley Jackson also uses a solid dominant impression of suspense, danger, and death throughout the whole story. Through many different examples, this dominant impression keeps the reader interested and causes him to keep reading. An excellent example of this impression can be seen through the black box. The box containing the lottery papers should represent joy and happiness and should be seen positively by the crowd. Instead, the box is represented with a description and an image that creates a totally different response form the crowd and portrays suspense, danger, and death.
\n The excellent combination of a good narrative focus, dominant impression, and concrete language create a well-written and outstanding descriptive story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"34657278","dateCreated":"1298411606","smartDate":"Feb 22, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"arifishman95","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/arifishman95","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34657278"},"dateDigested":1531974014,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"ari fishman","description":"\u201cThe Lottery\u201d by Shirley Jackson depicts a certain type of ritual, or sacrifice, which is cleverly handled through the description and somewhat hidden within the ordinary perception of nothing more than a lottery. A simple gathering of people, illustrated through the simple use of words, manages to \u201cdistract\u201d the reader from the gruesome outcome of this peculiar lottery. \u201cThe people of the village began to gather in the square, between the post office and the bank, around ten o'clock\u201d. Simple, direct, concise. Through the simplicity of these words, the reader is easily emerged into this world. Any reader can relate to a reunion and this is the power of this \u201cplain\u201d description. But then, the reader is presented with a twist. The \u201cblack box\u201d is introduced into the story. Just the simple name of the box does not resonate with the initial vision of the gathering. The box should represent joy and happiness, since it represents the lottery after all, but instead, the box is represented with a description and image that suggests suspense, danger, and death. \u201cThe black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained. \u201c A black, splintered, and stained box suggest incongruence. Its presence seems to be awkward and the simplicity through which it is brought forth stirs up the people. The lottery is something these people are excited about, something they look forward to. Why these people are excited and nervous is a whole different case however. An idealized version of the lottery is combined, through the description, with a twisted reality of death and suffering. Through this contrast, the reader gets a pure insight into a village still tied down to sadistic traditions. The dominant impression of the story is presented and augmented through the description, beginning with the innocence of a town reunion, and finishing with the macabre and savage repercussions of wild beliefs. This message is only reinforced by a strong and sequential point of view, starting with the description of the reunion, to the black box and the lottery itself, and ending with the demise of a \u201cmake-believe\u201d society, where not everything is what appears to be.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"34446804","dateCreated":"1297985921","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"Linndzy","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Linndzy","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1290198368\/Linndzy-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34446804"},"dateDigested":1531974014,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Lindsey \"The Lottery\"","description":"\u201cThe Lottery\u201d by Shirley Jackson is a very descriptive short story that has a very clear dominant impression and has a strong use of concrete and specific language. The dominant impression is clear and very easy to see and understand at first glance. \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green.\u201d The dominant impression would be rebirth and life because summer is usually defined as life because it is the time of year that all the flowers bloom and the tree\u2019s begin to give fruit. This story also gives very good descriptions of everything and anything from people to the blades of grass. But the narrative focus was mainly on the people and their actions; it focuses a lot on the specific details of their whereabouts. \u201cSoon the women, standing by their husbands, began to call to their children, and the children came reluctantly, having to be called four or five times.\u201d In this the narrator uses specific language to show and fully describe the attitude of the children, without coming right out and saying it. The narrator also takes time to describe specific important individuals, such as the man who conducts the lottery, Mr. Summers. \u201cHe was a round-faced, jovial man and he ran the coal business, and people were sorry for him because he had no children and his wife was a scold\u201d This description tells us a lot of how Mr. Summers might act and behave that might not have been discovered without this information. \u201cThe Lottery\u201d is a perfectly good example for a descriptive writing because it contains all the main elements, such as a dominant impression and concrete and specific language.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34489988","body":"Thanks Lindsey,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048492","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34388458","dateCreated":"1297912915","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"hansel.andrew","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/hansel.andrew","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34388458"},"dateDigested":1531974015,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"wills post","description":"In the short story "The Lottery," by Shirley Jackson, there is great description of the scenes and we can practically see them with our mind. The very first sentence "The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green" gives us concrete specific language about how the day is beautiful and peaceful. Because it's so flowery, it hints at a false start, makes us immediately aware of the false surroundings and reels us in and question what the conflict could be. Throughout the entire story, Shirley Jackson keeps the entire story focused on the Lottery itself. She does not give description about where the town is, what era, or the characters of the people. She solely focuses on the history of the Lottery, how people feel about it continuing and then the stoning itself. The only time she mentions another town is when she mentions that they are thinking of quitting the Lottery (and how absurd that is). The end of the story is epic because Shirley writes that someone gives little Davey Hutchinson pebbles to kill his own mother. This indirectly shows the characteristics of the people in the town. They are brainwashed into thinking the Lottery is acceptable. Shirley also uses a literary devise by leaving out what exactly the Lottery is. As readers, at first we think that the Lottery is a good thing and then we realize through the story that it's a bad thing. This gives the dominant impression that everything is okay superficially, but not really okay.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34420054","body":"Great Will,
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\nYou hit the marks here well, providing ample and clear evidence of why you think that this is a story with strong descriptive elements... I especially appreciate you noting the 'false start'. A couple of things... make sure that you proofread next time... there are a couple of mistakes here and if you read it out loud to yourself you might be able to identify them better. Also, the word 'lottery' should really only be capitalized if it is a part of a title.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297965600","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34366210","dateCreated":"1297893582","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"nikki-wiki","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/nikki-wiki","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34366210"},"dateDigested":1531974015,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Nikki Mora's Response ","description":"I think that Shirley Jackson was very successful in writing this descriptive short story. Her way of of opening the story with her first sentence being "The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green." The way she describes the day makes you feel like you're almost there. You can almost feel the "fresh warmth". This sentence makes the reader want to know what the story is going to be about and if makes the reader want to know if the rest of the story is going to be as well written and descriptive as this first sentence. Jackson's way of writing this short story having description everywhere makes the reader feel like if they are actually playing with the kids. "Bobby Martin had already stuffed his pockets full of stones, and the other boys soon followed his example, selecting the smoothest and roundest stones; Bobby and Harry Jones and Dickie Delacroix-- the villagers pronounced this name "Dellacroy"--eventually made a great pile of stones in one corner of the square and guarded it against the raids of the other boys. The girls stood aside, talking among themselves, looking over their shoulders at the boys." The author's use of vocabulary makes the reader enjoy what they are reading and makes them keep reading the short story because she is not repetitive with her word choice.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34367036","body":"Alright good Nikki,
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\nBut... what do you think the dominant impression is here? Do you think that the story has a narrative point of view? Give some more... this seems a little under-done.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297894172","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34306360","dateCreated":"1297821029","smartDate":"Feb 15, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"AmandaTrejos","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AmandaTrejos","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34306360"},"dateDigested":1531974015,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"amanda","description":"I believe that this short story is incredibly good written; the descriptions used by Joyce are enjoyably descriptive and rich in vocabulary. His choice of words and his way of describing the scenery brings the story to life and you can actually imagine what is happening in a very concrete way. At the beginning of the story, when people are gathering at the square for the lottery, the scene seems very real. \u201cSoon the men began to gather. Surveying their own children, speaking of planting and rain, tractors and taxes. They stood together, away from the pile of stones in the corner, and their jokes were quiet and they smiled rather than laughed. The women, wearing faded house dresses and sweaters, came shortly after their menfolk.\u201d In here, you can actually visualize the scene in a very vivid way. Every word that is chosen takes up a big role because it describes the scenery very well. The story also has a dominant impression because since the beginning of the story, one can understand what is going on and what exactly the story is about. Because of such good description, the reader is captured and gets immediately hypnotized by the essence of the story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34366850","body":"Amanda,
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\n1) Good is an adjective, and written is a verb... so you need a what to describe the verb and what is the correct choice? "I believe that this short story is incredibly good written;"
\n2) What is the dominant impression though... what do you think the main idea is that comes through the narrative?
\n3) Joyce did not write this... Shirley Jackson did.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297894041","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34447934","body":"I believe that this short story is written in avery nice way; the descriptions used by Shirley Jackson are enjoyably descriptive and rich in vocabulary.
\n The dominant impression of this story is that a man is going to sell the lottery in a town that has been doing this for a long time. People gather around and wait to be called on so they can pick a number and hope they were the ones who won the lottery.","dateCreated":"1297986875","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"AmandaTrejos","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AmandaTrejos","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34489894","body":"Alright then,
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048412","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34236586","dateCreated":"1297742081","smartDate":"Feb 14, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"dmarin464","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dmarin464","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1225941095\/dmarin464-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34236586"},"dateDigested":1531974016,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"The Lottery - Description","description":"In Jackson\u2019s \u201cThe Lottery\u201d, she is successful in writing a descriptive short story. It is descriptive because instead of just writing about what is going on and what people are saying, Shirley describes these actions as they happen, sort of like passing the description on to each character to another. For example, Shirley would describe the actions of Mr. Summers and \u2018pass it on\u2019 to Mr. Martin and started describing his actions. All these descriptions were linked to the dominant impression of the lottery. With a nice introduction of a description summer and nature with flowers blossoming, the description soon veers to the focus of the people who appear before Mr. Summer and his box containing the lottery, it starts to describe individuals as well as the group as well in Shirley\u2019s style of narrative focus. Shirley would describe a person going up to Mr. Summers, picking up a folded paper, and going back along with their thoughts and dialogue with family. Then Shirley would describe group as a whole by saying, for example, that the group half listened to the instructions as they knew what they would do and even after they had the folded paper, all of the people would not open them till the end. Still staying on the dominant impression of the lottery, Shirley changes her narrative focus of individual to individual as well as group as a whole, and uses distinguished vocabulary such as boisterous, reprimands, and perfunctory. Even though Shirley uses these strong concrete vocabulary scattered through the story, the description is still clear and well written. The element of suspension was also a factor that helped Jackson with the description of people\u2019s thoughts and feelings. After calling out name after name, people would start to whisper and wonder who got the lottery, and people who walked up, picked up the folded piece of paper, and went back down served as a descriptive motive of these actions and thoughts through suspense.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34366612","body":"Daniel,
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\n1)Thanks, but could you explain this a bit more thoroughly..."...sort of like passing the description on to each character to another".
\n2) What is the dominant impression, in one word..."All these descriptions were linked to the dominant impression of the lottery."
\n3) This sentence is very confusing... could you clean it up, break it into two or three sentences, use some semi-colons? "With a nice introduction of a description summer and nature with flowers blossoming, the description soon veers to the focus of the people who appear before Mr. Summer and his box containing the lottery, it starts to describe individuals as well as the group as well in Shirley\u2019s style of narrative focus."
\n4) I really like your focus on the intricacies of the plot and the narrative... good job.
\n5) OK, when we write about writers (or anyone else we don't personally know for that matter) we use their second name, not their first... hence, Jackson is Jackson, not Shirley.
\n6) Is the lottery really the dominant impression, or maybe it represents something else... what do you think?
\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297893870","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34446422","body":"1) I mean that the description is sort of like 'passed on' in the sense that one moment Jackson describes one character, and then 'passes on' and starts describing another character.
\n2) The dominant impression is hope; represented in this story by the lottery.
\n3)"The story starts with a nice introduction of a description of summer and nature with flower blossoming. However, the description soon veers to the focus of the characters who appear before Mr. Summer and his box containing the lottery. It starts to describe individuals as well as the group itself as well in Jackson's style of narrative focus.
\n4) Thank you!
\n5) Understood. I'll use last names from now on. Thanks
\n6) Hope or opportunity could be the dominant impression as all the characters really hope they can win the lottery.","dateCreated":"1297985566","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"dmarin464","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/dmarin464","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1225941095\/dmarin464-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34489876","body":"Thanks Daniel,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048370","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34228208","dateCreated":"1297733422","smartDate":"Feb 14, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"melafavini","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/melafavini","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34228208"},"dateDigested":1531974016,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"melanie favini response","description":" In the story "The Lottery" by Shirley Jackson, there is a lot of good description and concrete, specific language that we have also discussed in class. We can see a good dominant impression right from the first sentence of the story. "The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green." Here we see how the narrator fully describes a day in summer. Concrete and specific language is also used, "Soon the women, standing by their husbands, began to call to their children, and the children came reluctantly, having to be called four or five times." Here we see how the word reluctantly is being used and is describing the children. Specific language is also used in "The people separated good-humoredly to let her through." Here, we can see how an unusual word (good-humoredly) is used. The narrator describes not only the day in summer, but the people surrounding it. "The women, wearing faded house dresses and sweaters, came shortly after their menfolk." The narrator also described Mr. Summers, the man who conducts the lottery as a "round-faced, jovial man and he ran the coal business, and people were sorry for him. because he had no children and his wife was a scold." By reading this story, we can imagine the setting of the story and the people in it. This is very important while reading a passage since it lets the reader imagine what is happening and how the people in the story are acting and how they are feeling, and most importantly, how the narrator feels. It also has the location of objects which gives the reader an image of how the things are located around. "They stood together, away from the pile of stones in the corner."","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34366114","body":"Great Melanie,
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\nGood job, but what do you think is the dominant impression here then... in one word: "We can see a good dominant impression right from the first sentence of the story. "The morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green." Here we see how the narrator fully describes a day in summer."
\nAlso, could you provide a conclusion to this?
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297893507","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34417190","body":"The dominant impression would be summer, life, rebirth.
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\nIn conclusion, this story has a concrete a meaningful description of everything, from people to places and dialogue.","dateCreated":"1297963418","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"melafavini","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/melafavini","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"34420112","body":"Thanks Melanie,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297965641","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}