{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34720570","dateCreated":"1298487227","smartDate":"Feb 23, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"bibi_lamas","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/bibi_lamas","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1285202747\/bibi_lamas-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34720570"},"dateDigested":1531974102,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"bianca","description":"In the story The Lottery Shirley Jackson achieves the goal of writing a descriptive story. From the beginning of the story the reader already feels part of it. The language she uses is very clear and easy which lets one feel like standing in the scene experiencing it. \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green\u201d. The simplicity of writing lets one flow into the story being able to imagine the scenery, the feeling, and the characters. It leads one into creating an own vision with her descriptions. When reading the begging of the story the feeling was like a d\u00e9j\u00e0 vu the start of summer with the warm breeze the chattering birds, the colorful flower all led me to a better understanding of the story through her forceful descriptions. The dominant impression showed through in first statement of the story the idea of summer being revival and life, which was exactly the feeling experienced at the start of summer. Shirley Jackson attains this successful portrayal by the correct word choice, dominant impression and a point of view. The point of view maintains intact for the whole story. The reader can follow and understand what the children, the adults and people are doing all along the story in the town. The cleanness of this story makes it a good descriptive story since even though the words are simple and straight forward they provide imagination to the mind of the reader.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"34503250","dateCreated":"1298062262","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"pprada","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/pprada","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1315457538\/pprada-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34503250"},"dateDigested":1531974102,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Paula Prada ","description":"The story The Lottery by Shirley Jackson, is a very well written story. To start with, it has a great dominant impression. It gives you a detailed idea about the rest of the story with its rich thesis statement. \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green. The people of the village began to gather in the square, between the post office and the bank, around ten o'clock; in some towns there were so many people that the lottery took two days and had to be started on June 2th\u201d. This gives me the feeling of the setting of the place, the crowd, and it gives me a \u201c heads up\u201d to what the story is about. This story also contains very sophisticated and descriptive language on the story. They use verbs such as \u201csplintered, fussing, and assembled\u201d, nouns such as \u201cparaphernalia and reprimands\u201d, descriptive adjectives like \u201c jovial, boisterous, shabbier\u201d, and adverbs like\u201d hurriedly and carelessly\u201d. Shirley Jackson does a great job being descriptive with her concrete, specific language. The vocabulary used in this story makes it much more interesting and easy to imagine the story. The dominant impression of the story is hope and faith, because all the citizens are hoping to win the lottery and they have faith that they will.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"34467132","dateCreated":"1298008008","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"taeyang","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/taeyang","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1223342653\/taeyang-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34467132"},"dateDigested":1531974103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Brian wiki","description":"The Lottery by Shirley Jackson is a descriptive story, and we can see that word choice, dominant impression, and point of view are really good, and well written. So we can understand better, and we can imagine every single scene. First of all at the beginning there is a descriptive sentence \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green\u201d, there are many descriptive words, and it doesn't describe the things objectively, it describes subjectively, so we can imagine that sunny day and the weather. And after that many things start to going on. Like they start to describe the black box "The black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained". When i read this i could perfectly imagine this box, how it colored, how does it look like. Shirley did awesome job on this story, not all of them but many dialogues, and sentences are written in descriptive writing. And every sentence she wrote has different point of view. And one thing i got confused about this story, that i didn't know we could use that many dialogues on descriptive writing. But even though there are many dialogues, Shirley also put some descriptions in dialogues "Listening to the young folks, nothing's good enough for them. Next thing you know, they'll be wanting to go back to living in caves, nobody work any more, live hat way for a while. Used to be a saying about 'Lottery in June, corn be heavy soon.' First thing you know, we'd all be eating stewed chickweed and acorns. There's always been a lottery," he added petulantly." In this dialogue, we can see the clear imgae that what he is talking about. I don't know he is speaking politely or not. But still it shows his victorious feeling voice to us. The topic of this writing is "The Lottery" which is most of the people in this world like it. And the words that she chose make the readers to keep reading, because of the description in that, readers start to think what it is. So it has nice word choice, many different point of views (many characters), and strong dominant impression.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34490274","body":"Thanks Brian,
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\nGood work,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048771","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34462556","dateCreated":"1297999828","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"joseph86","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/joseph86","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34462556"},"dateDigested":1531974103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"joseph wiki","description":"To make a good description the writing needs three things, word choice, dominant impression, and point of view. If one meets these three things the description is successful. In \u201cthe lottery\u201d by Shirley Jackson these the criteria are met. The concrete and solid words that make the imagery very powerful and one can imagine it. Not only there is concrete word but the One example of this concrete language is when she is describing the box, she doesn`t only tell it\u2019s a black box, she scrutinizes every single detail about the box \u201cThe black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained.\u201d ( the lottery). This is one of many examples that show the good word choice of this writing. Another good point to make the description successful is that the narrator maintains a consistent point of view. One can imagine oneself in that small town and seeing what the narrator is describing. She describes what the men are doing, what the children are doing and what all the town is doing when the lottery comes.
\n\u201cThe girls stood aside, talking among themselves, looking over their shoulders at the boys. and the very small children rolled in the dust or clung to the hands of their older brothers or sisters. Soon the men began to gather. surveying their own children, speaking of planting and rain, tractors and taxes. They stood together, away from the pile of stones in the corner, and their jokes were quiet and they smiled rather than laughed.\u201d
\nThe other point that makes this short story a good description is has a good dominant impression. This is describing the lottery. However she describes it in a suspenseful way. She leaves out some information at the begging and puts at the end. This motivates the reader to keep reading. So because this story has good word choice, a good dominant impression and a good point of view, it an be considered a successful descriptive piece of writing.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34490190","body":"Good job Joseph,
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\nYou obviously spent some time proofreading this and it shows.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048691","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34451270","dateCreated":"1297989750","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"jose_4595","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/jose_4595","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34451270"},"dateDigested":1531974103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"jose rodriguez","description":"The story is a good descriptive story. She uses the three things that we learned in class, which were clear language, a point of view that is easy to follow, and has a strong dominant impression. She uses a good point of view because we can imagine everything that is happening in the scene. We are also able to imagine the scene better thanks to her clear language. An example of her language we can see it in the first sentence that says \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green\u201d we can picture the background of the story with her use of verbs and adjectives. She also uses her clear language to describe us where are the people, when she describes the town she tells us that there aren\u2019t many people and that the square was in between the post office and the bank. She also told us what the men, women, and the children were doing at that time. Right now we can picture the town square with all the people in it. Then she describes the black box, and how it has been changing over the years. At the end of the story she adds a lot of dialogue in which the conflict is found. Her dominant impression of the story is that something, we don\u2019t know what, is going to happen. Since we don\u2019t know what on going to happen, we keep on reading to see if we understand. She started to describe us the town and the square and also why were the people there, the lottery. Because her language is so happy, because she explained that it was a sunny day in the summer, we all expected the lottery to end with someone receiving a prize of some kind. We didn\u2019t expect the story to end like that, Mrs. Hutchinson was clearly not happy that she won the lottery; she was actually hysterical about it. We can also infer that the entire town threw stones at her because at the beginning of the story she explained that the stones were all piled up and that the kids were stuffing them into their pockets, also the fact that when she was in the center of the square, Old Man Warner threw her a stone. This story was very interesting and it also followed a certain order in which the things happened in the story. In other words, this story was a very good descriptive story.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34490062","body":"Thanks Jose,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1298048568","smartDate":"Feb 18, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34385820","dateCreated":"1297910028","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"pjoaristi321","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/pjoaristi321","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34385820"},"dateDigested":1531974103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Paulina Joaristi","description":"When writing a descriptive piece the writer\u2019s main goal is to make the reader become a participant in the story. We want the readers to be able to feel all the feelings that we as the writer had when writing the piece. A clear vision of our topic and experience is what we wish to portray. The Lottery by Shirley Jackson successfully accomplishes this goal. Layer after layer we get a clear view of the authors purpose for writing this piece. We get strong, clear and concise language right from the very beginning. \u201cThe morning of June 27th was clear and sunny, with the fresh warmth of a full-summer day; the flowers were blossoming profusely and the grass was richly green\u201d Any person can clearly identify with that description no matter what his background. Instead of going into a complex selection of words to try to make the piece more \u201cabsorbing\u201d she uses clear and concise language that can be identifiable by all. She follows a sequential order instead of jumping back and forward, which makes us have a clear understanding of what\u2019s going on. People usually like movies more than books because movies give you a visual perspective, however Shirley give such an ideal illustration of her characters that there is no need for a movie. \u201cHe was a round-faced, jovial man and he ran the coal business, and people were sorry for him, because he had no children and his wife was a scold.\u201d Clear descriptions of the characters make it easy to identify them as different individuals and the set of lively details engages the reader. As I finished reading the story the dominant impression really hit me and I realized that the author had succeeded in evoking feelings in me that I hadn\u2019t comprehended before. However although I think it\u2019s a well written piece, it is also important to remember that what was left out of the story is as important as what was included. I think the author gives way too much importance to the description of the black box. \u201cThe black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained.\u201d At first I thought that the reason for this description was that it would result in a dramatic effect at the end of the story, and I was highly disappointed when it did not. A strong narrative point of view drives us through the story captivating our senses until the very last moment. In the end the writer achieved what she most wanted we were able to understand her experience.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34419504","body":"Thanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297965164","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34375770","dateCreated":"1297902006","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"negrasolano","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/negrasolano","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1222961550\/negrasolano-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34375770"},"dateDigested":1531974103,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"nicole solano","description":"
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\n The Lottery by Shirley Jackson is a very good descriptive story.She applies and uses the three main elements that have been discussed in class very well which are narrative focus, dominant impression and concrete, specific language.The writer makes it easy for the reader to imagine the setting\/scene of the story in ones mind.He also gives suspense to his description of things and finally finishes the story with suspense.
\nThe language use to make an image in our heads of the place is detailed and descriptive considering the writer uses uncomplicated vocabulary, for example it is easy to know where the lottery is being held and what is near\/surrounding it.She also gives a good description of the black box and how it used to be and how it is now.The point of view of the writer is easily understand and found due the easy vocabulary she used, and also she was brief but comprehensive at the time. Not only does she describe the setting physically well, but she gives a good explanation about the people that she sees and what they are doing, which helps us create an idea of how they are feeling.Also she makes sure we understand the difference between the adults, and the kids, between a women and a men.She also introduces dialogue to the story which helps us as readers understand more and create a clearer image in our heads.It also brings more excitement and interest to the story because of the suspense it gives and creates, especially because at the end we don\u2019t know the reason why they are punishing Mrs.Hutchinson.The writer uses the main three components of descriptive writing to give the reader a good image of the setting of the story.This is done by applying a lot of good,simple descriptive vocabulary that help us create that image.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34418008","body":"Not bad Nicole,
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\nJust a couple of things...
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\n1) What would you say is the dominant impression of this work? I'm not sure that I found that...
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\n2) Could you include two specific quotes which detail good, evocative descriptive writing and briefly explain why you consider them to be so.
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\n3) Try to proofread... this is well-organized and your ideas are clear, but there are many, many errors... Read it out loud to yourself and see whether there are mistakes.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297964018","smartDate":"Feb 17, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"34342986","dateCreated":"1297876561","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"meladovelado","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/meladovelado","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1317260331\/meladovelado-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/davidgarethw-books-b.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/34342986"},"dateDigested":1531974104,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Melanie Velado Response","description":"The Lottery by Shirley Jackson is a very good descriptive story. She emphasizes the three descriptive elements, which are using clear and concise language, a strong and identifiable dominant impression, and a consistent narrative point of view. Shirley Jackson uses very clear, concise, and simple vocabulary that carries her narrative viewpoint across. Because of the vocabulary she uses and the directions that she provides, it is very easy tom imagine the scene of the lottery. Since the beginning to the end she uses perfect language to portray the location of every subject in the story. \u201cThe people of the village began to gather in the square, between the post office and the bank, around ten o'clock\u201d (The Lottery) Even though the narrator uses very simple words, it is easy to visualize where the square that the lottery is being held is located. She also describes how the boys excitingly play with the stones and how the girls stare at the boys over their shoulders. Shirley describes every part of society in a different way such as the men, the boys, the girls, and the women. She portrays them in a very diverse way, providing clear distinction between them. When the lottery is held, she depicts the black boxes\u2019 past. \u201cThe black box grew shabbier each year: by now it was no longer completely black but splintered badly along one side to show the original wood color, and in some places faded or stained,\u201d (The Lottery) The adjectives used in this phrase give visual imagery of the black box, making the reader more interested in the object. Finally, nearly at the end of the story the narrator includes a lot of dialogue. This dialogue helps the reader understand what the conflict in the story is, and the length dialogue also provides some kind of suspense, leaving the reader with more interest and excitement. The narrator keeps a clear dominant impression of suspense that something is going to happen, such as introducing the big event at the lottery at the beginning of the story, and then leaving suspense at the end of the story because the reader doesn\u2019t know why Mrs. Hutchinson is being punished. The narrator also portrays a strong narrative point of view. The reader can imagine and visualize the story every step of the way because of the vocabulary and the directions that the narrator provides. Finally, the narrator also uses clear, simple and concise language, which makes the story interesting and easy to read and understand.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"34367230","body":"Great Melanie,
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\nYou read closely and followed instructions well... Good work.
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\nThanks,
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\nWebster","dateCreated":"1297894288","smartDate":"Feb 16, 2011","userCreated":{"username":"davidgarethw","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/davidgarethw","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}